A Climbers Haiku

[MasterBlaster]

The Oak crys for me
It calls for my expertise
I respond with care







Whos up next?

 

[Stumper]

I've never tried Haiku. I'm not even sure about the rules that define it.

An apple spreads its branches
Invading sacred space
I shape its life.

Does that make the grade?

 

[MasterBlaster]

Close.

The rules are pretty simple.

Syllables.

First line- 5, 2nd line - 7, 3rd line 5.

5, 7, 5.






Where yas bean?

 

[MasterBlaster]

The tauntline has worked
Everyone says that its wrong
Have I somehow failed?

 

[Stumper]

Ahh.....

I was hunting last week then had a death in the family so did a quick return and turn around and went to the funeral. 2500 miles. 1 deer. 1 blizzard. 1 funeral.

 

[Stumper]

Apple spreads its branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life.

 

[MasterBlaster]

Originally posted by Stumper
Apple spreads its branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life.

Almost!

Your first line was over by one.

 

[Scars2prove-it]

Originally posted by MasterBlaster
Everyone says that its wrong

Doesn't this have 8?

 

[Stumper]

Too many miles. Too little sleep. I would still expect to successfully count syllables!

Butch asks for haiku
I fumble repeatedly
Virtuous patience.

Apple spreads branches
Invading a sacred space
I shape it for life

 

[MasterBlaster]

Originally posted by Scars2prove-it
Doesn't this have 8?

Nope! Seven.

 

[Stumper]

Err.. Butch, I think that you would need to write it "Ev'ryone says that its wrong." (or "Everyone says its wrong"). Everyone is 4 syllables when it is enunciated fully so Scars is correct.

 

[MasterBlaster]

Yup! Yur right!

I was out of my mind from eggnog!

 

[NickfromWI]

In honor of Butch the MasterBlaster...

Present-day dino,
sticks to his trusty tautline.
Will he see the light?


love
nick

 

[Koa Man]

I get paid for job
I wait patiently for hours
Oh bank closed today.

 

[Sylvatica]

My haiku is poor

The Japanese are appalled

But, it's my first one!

 

[MasterBlaster]

Originally posted by Sylvatica
My haiku is poor

The Japanese are appalled

But, it's my first one!

Your Haiku was grand!
It could have had more insight
But, it's your first one.

 

[blue]

what the f&%$ ?

 

[John Paul Sanborn]

Meesh-El has a number of mine on her website. I lost most of them when my computer hiccuped.

the sylabic rythum need not be so exact, and there are other combinations that are acceptable.

the real idea is to pass an image on to the reader

water running down limbs
thunder boombs
the smell of burning rope

boughs move under foot
wind rustles leaves
I am content

another concept is to get a point across as minimalisticly as possible

two cycle smoke in the air
a tree dies
my family is feed

 

[MasterBlaster]

Hey! This is hardcore! 5 -7 - 5 !

 

[spacemule]

Traditional Japanese was 5-7-5. Modern haiku deviates from this.


The large, shiny nail,
That the roofing hammer struck,
Was my purple thumb.


The cool evening
Stars shine with the soft lights
Of fireflies.